Improvements

After reviewing our second draft we came up with a lot more improvements.
The voice over we have decided is not what we want. We instead have taken inspiration from the voice over in Trainspotting. The short, snappy phrases and philosophical meaning was what we wanted.
We also need more comedy and to show a story so we have added more scenes. The first is the character going to her house and finding out she has been kicked out from a letter stuck on the door. The second is her in public toilets, having gone there after being kicked out. We are putting these two scenes first and the bench and brick wall scene after them. This way it is more of a story as the audience can see where she has gone in the day. We are completely cutting out the bedroom scene and the credits are going to be embedded in props at the house scene.
Also as our wipe screen transition was our strongest point we are adding another one right at the beginning.